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Old 05-23-2007, 03:09 PM   #1
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Sasuke and Sakura: a ninja love story

At this time, Sasuke is training with Orochimaru. Sakura sat on the bench where she last saw him...when he left the village. Sasuke's words still floated around her head.

"Sakura, thank you".

As she quietly sat, she thought of him standing with Orochimaru with a blood stained sword in his hand and dead bodies of ninja surrounding them. She shivered at the thought of that. She looked up at the sky and remembered her missions with Naruto, Kakashi, and Sasuke.

"Sakura Chan"

Sakura turned her head to see Naruto walking up to her nad sitting next to her.

"What Naruto, I'm not going on a date with you," she snapped.

"Don't worry, I'm not"

"Well, what is it"

"Nothing, I was just looking for you since we havent talked for a while and-"

"WHAT IF I DON'T WANT TO TALK," Sakura snapped.

Naruto tried to talk for no words came out.

"Idiot".

Sakura stomped off and Naruto still sat there with his mouth wide open.
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At Orochimaru's hideout, Sasuke leaned against the wall silently. He diddnt let anyone talk to him since he was'nt in the mood. When someone tried to talk to him he gave them "the look". Even Karin or his teamates couldnt talk to him. He stood up and started to walk out.

"Sasuke, where are you going"

"I'm going for a walk, AND DON'T YOU DARE FOLLOW"

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Old 05-23-2007, 09:48 PM   #2
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Well, i love the pairing of sasusaku, and i'm a sucker for romance story. but this was kinda short, so i can't tell you exaclty what i think about it, but i do want you to keep at it, and update

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Old 05-24-2007, 06:52 PM   #3
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okay I'll try to make the next chapter longer

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Old 05-24-2007, 09:45 PM   #4
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lol it sucked seriously

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Old 05-25-2007, 06:46 PM   #5
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I like it so far,there Basicly Acting like each other and they don't even know it!!!!!Keep up the good work!

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Old 05-28-2007, 02:53 PM   #6
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thank you very much

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Old 05-28-2007, 03:12 PM   #7
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It was spectaculor amazing incredible it was okay.

The Sakura part was mediocre, but the Sasuke part was one of the worst I have ever saw.

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Old 05-29-2007, 05:46 PM   #8
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Okay, I dont know why...but.................of well

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Old 05-29-2007, 05:49 PM   #9
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it was pretty good! keep it up!

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Old 05-29-2007, 08:29 PM   #10
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Thank you very much, if you have any ideas for the story, just wtirte them and I'll try as hars as I can to put it in

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Old 05-29-2007, 08:52 PM   #11
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Sasuke Chapter 2

Sakura walked out of the village muttering what Naruto said. She was really annoyed and upset. She just thought of Sasuke every second, especially that thought she had. Then she heard a crack behind a tree. She was startled and turned quickly...no one was there. She took out a kunai knife.

"SHOW YOURSELF".

No one answered, all she heard was fottsteps walking throught the trees. Then...she heard a *CHING*. Someone was gonna take out a sword and attack from behind. She quickly turned and went in a stance.

"CHA, IM READY!" The Inner Sakura, cleched a fist.

"Sakura Chan"

Sakura was startled. Someone was behind her....right behind her. She reconised the voice, she felt breathing down her neck. She turned slowly.

"Sa-Sasuke...Kun"

Sasuke looked at her with sencere eyes. Sakura looked ta him with shock. It has been a while, since she last saw him when she was with Sai and Naruto. She felt a tear foll down her cheek.

"Hmph, youre as useless as when we were togenther on a team"

"YOURE THE ONE WHOS USELESS, YOU JOINED OROCHIMARU AFTER I TRIED AND TRIED -"

"shutup"

Sasuke appeared behind her and put a sword up to her neck. He put his mouth up to her ear.

"Get out of here, go back to the village"

Sakura was silent since she was confused.

" *SIGH*, I LO-"

"SASUKE"

Sasuke groaned.

"I TOLD THEM NOT TO FOLLOW, Sakura, get away form me, I dont want you to get hurt"

He turned and looked at Sakura, who was shocked by what she was hearing.

"I- dont want to leave you"

Sasuke pished her in some bushes. He put his hand on her mouth.

"Stay there, and keep quiet!"

Sasuke turned and saw Karin.

"I told you not to follow," Sasuke snapped

Karin was silent.

"I just wanted to see what you were doing"

"NOW YOU KNOW NOW GO AWAY KARIN".

Sasuek glared at Karin as she walked away.

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Old 05-29-2007, 08:53 PM   #12
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Listen people, I nned tro know about Karin, her abilities etc. I dont care who tells me I just wanta know. Thank you

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Old 05-29-2007, 09:24 PM   #13
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lol,the manga doesn't tell us you....not worth a insult..

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Old 05-30-2007, 01:37 PM   #14
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okay, I just wanted to know about Karin so I can make her be in the story without messing her up...I guess she'll only be in a few chapters

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Old 05-31-2007, 09:15 PM   #15
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ok, now it's a little confusing. He seems to keep materilzing out of thin air in places. But other then that. It's one of my fav pairing, so even if you said they took off all their clothes and ran naked through ramdom peoples' sprinkler, i would have to say THIS IS AWESOME, so . . . .

THIS IS AWESOME

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Old 06-01-2007, 08:49 AM   #16
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thnak you Kisara

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Old 06-01-2007, 08:32 PM   #17
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kisara,sorry thats my sister and she crazy ,but i think it's really good so far.Keep up the good work!

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Old 06-01-2007, 08:35 PM   #18
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could be better...i wasnt feeling it that much but atleast you tried

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Not impressive, you need to work A LOT on all of your fics.

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Old 06-02-2007, 09:18 AM   #20
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Thank you for all the replys...VANCE YOUR NOT MY TEACHER, thnak you for the advice but...I TRY

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