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Old 01-03-2007, 09:47 PM   #1
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Kurenai Developing Trust - A Naruto X Kurenai fanfic

This is my newly finished project. The first fic I have ever written. It's complete because I didn't want to release it until it was complete.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3323930/1/

It is Naruto X Kurenai as mentioned in the title.

Here is the plot summarized:

"Kurenai's bitterness causes her to torture Naruto in his youth. She realizes her mistake but it is too late. Naruto is detached and emotionless and when he finally becomes a Genin his Jounin instructor turns out to be Kurenai. Naruto X Kurenai"

Criticise constructively if you can. I'm Finnish but tell me immediately if something is wrong with grammar or spelling.

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Old 01-04-2007, 08:12 AM   #2
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GREAT JOB !! ITS UBER GREAT !
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Too bad naruto lost his eyes, arm and hands only would have been cool if he had his eyes.
But it was still the best after another Naruto X Kurenai FF ive read, this is now secound place on my fav FF list

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Old 01-04-2007, 08:21 AM   #3
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You know, I don't think you should spoil that much :D

Thanks for the feedback though.

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Old 01-05-2007, 07:42 PM   #4
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A great fan fiction!

You can never get enough NaruKure.

I didn't like how the Akatsuki was though.

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Old 01-07-2007, 06:12 PM   #5
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Yes I know that the Akatsuki are there just to give Naruto an adversary. The fights are bad too, I admit. I don't like writing or reading them.

It's good that there have been so many that have checked this thread...Well, maybe no-one likes NaruKure.

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Old 01-07-2007, 10:41 PM   #6
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stunning amazing the best non-comiedy fan fic I have read great parring to

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Old 01-08-2007, 10:05 PM   #7
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havn't read it but it sound good and Darla gave me the link

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Old 01-09-2007, 04:19 PM   #8
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I hope you read it.

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Old 01-09-2007, 04:39 PM   #9
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I read it and it made me cry a little bit.

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Old 01-09-2007, 06:08 PM   #10
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At what point did you cry? I'm really interested in that since I didn't cry while writing it although I think nobody does that...

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Spoiler:

At the part where Naruto gave up his hands and eyes for Kurenai.

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Old 01-09-2007, 06:18 PM   #12
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Thanks for telling me but is it too much to ask to put spoiler tags on that since someone might want to read others' opinions before reading and thus be spoiled by your post. It's not that bad but if it's not too big of a problem...pretty please.

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Old 01-10-2007, 09:49 AM   #13
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Are you going to write more fanfics soon? Because I like your style and I want more.

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Old 01-10-2007, 06:55 PM   #14
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I might make an NaruIno, NaruAnko or plain no-romance fanfic at some point. Don't know when though. I have this idea for a lot darker fic than this one but right now I'm writing a fiction that has nothing to do with Naruto so it might take a while.

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Old 01-10-2007, 07:59 PM   #15
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That...Was GOLD!!! I liked near the end Jiraiya said "That kid was banging Yuuhi Kurenai?!?"

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Old 01-13-2007, 07:28 AM   #16
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I made slight alterations in Chapter 2 but they are not worth reading it again. They are very minor.

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