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At the end of this story, the author SWEARS that her main character isn't a Mary Sue.
I know this is bleach...but
'Ichigo feels a sharp pain in his chest. Rukia offers to find the problem. Turns out its a girl. A girl from America. She posseses every power Ichigo has including his hollow. How and why does she have his powers? Please, iam so sorry full summary inside!'
It's an IchiRuki, but her OC is Ichigos soulmate, who is also from America, the same country the author lives in. And shes stronger than Ichigo
I guess it isn't a self-insert though
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Originally Posted by Whirlpool
We are enslaved by Aliens, we just don't know it. They are basically humans who have ascended due to vast knowledge. When you die, you are reincarnated because you don't have a certain amount of knowledge to ascend.
Why do you think there's no-one like Sun Tzu or Leo Da Vinci anymore?
At the end of this story, the author SWEARS that her main character isn't a Mary Sue.
Perfect example of my hate.
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Originally Posted by SaishuSoda
I have three main pet peeves with fanfiction; 1. OCs (self inserts)
It is rarely ever done well. 9/10 times its being forced down my throat to acknowledge how "awesome" this OC main character is, but in reality it is just another terrible Mary Sue. Don't get me wrong I don't mind a small OC here and there, but when its a main character it is most the time akward and painful since you can feel with every word that the author is inserting themselves as the "cool kid" in the Naruto universe.
Honestly I'm sure IC Raikage or any of the kages for that matter, would have bitch-slapped that Mary Sue Oc around her second sentence.
“What a terrible story. But appropriate for our world. Sometimes I feel like I’m walking over a giant pile of shit. Morality and justice don’t really suit me. Words like that and what comes out of asses are surprisingly similar.” - (Black Lagoon)
"If you have time to think of a beautiful end, then live beautifully until the end." - (Gintama)
"If you're always worried about crushing the ants beneath you...you won't be able to walk." - (Berserk)
"I’ve never expected a miracle. I'll get things done myself." - (Berserk)
"To obtain, something of equal value must be lost." - (Full Metal Alchemist)
"If living means bowing down to the likes of you bastards, I'd rather die on my feet with my head held high." - (Samurai Champloo)
"If you pretend to feel a certain way, the feeling can become genuine all by accident."
- (Darker Than Black)
"When do you think people die? When they are shot through the heart by the bullet of a pistol? No. When they are ravaged by an incurable disease? No. When they drink a soup made from a poisonous mushroom!? No! It's when... they are forgotten." - (One Piece)
Last edited by SaishuSoda; 02-14-2012 at 04:22 PM.
Honestly I'm sure IC Raikage or any of the kages for that matter, would have bitch-slapped that Mary Sue Oc around her the second sentence.
Read the reviews, i said that
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Originally Posted by Whirlpool
We are enslaved by Aliens, we just don't know it. They are basically humans who have ascended due to vast knowledge. When you die, you are reincarnated because you don't have a certain amount of knowledge to ascend.
Why do you think there's no-one like Sun Tzu or Leo Da Vinci anymore?
“What a terrible story. But appropriate for our world. Sometimes I feel like I’m walking over a giant pile of shit. Morality and justice don’t really suit me. Words like that and what comes out of asses are surprisingly similar.” - (Black Lagoon)
"If you have time to think of a beautiful end, then live beautifully until the end." - (Gintama)
"If you're always worried about crushing the ants beneath you...you won't be able to walk." - (Berserk)
"I’ve never expected a miracle. I'll get things done myself." - (Berserk)
"To obtain, something of equal value must be lost." - (Full Metal Alchemist)
"If living means bowing down to the likes of you bastards, I'd rather die on my feet with my head held high." - (Samurai Champloo)
"If you pretend to feel a certain way, the feeling can become genuine all by accident."
- (Darker Than Black)
"When do you think people die? When they are shot through the heart by the bullet of a pistol? No. When they are ravaged by an incurable disease? No. When they drink a soup made from a poisonous mushroom!? No! It's when... they are forgotten." - (One Piece)
I would laugh hysterically if my review actually happened.
Kokukage or whatever: Madara-chan, put them under my mary-sue genjutsu
Madara: ....what? No.
*Raikage v2 speed bitchslaps her to the door*
*Onoki points towards ame* "Get the fuck out"
Me:
EDIT: She deleted it
My one review broke her will and made her delete it, i should get a medal or something
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Spoiler:
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Originally Posted by Whirlpool
We are enslaved by Aliens, we just don't know it. They are basically humans who have ascended due to vast knowledge. When you die, you are reincarnated because you don't have a certain amount of knowledge to ascend.
Why do you think there's no-one like Sun Tzu or Leo Da Vinci anymore?
“What a terrible story. But appropriate for our world. Sometimes I feel like I’m walking over a giant pile of shit. Morality and justice don’t really suit me. Words like that and what comes out of asses are surprisingly similar.” - (Black Lagoon)
"If you have time to think of a beautiful end, then live beautifully until the end." - (Gintama)
"If you're always worried about crushing the ants beneath you...you won't be able to walk." - (Berserk)
"I’ve never expected a miracle. I'll get things done myself." - (Berserk)
"To obtain, something of equal value must be lost." - (Full Metal Alchemist)
"If living means bowing down to the likes of you bastards, I'd rather die on my feet with my head held high." - (Samurai Champloo)
"If you pretend to feel a certain way, the feeling can become genuine all by accident."
- (Darker Than Black)
"When do you think people die? When they are shot through the heart by the bullet of a pistol? No. When they are ravaged by an incurable disease? No. When they drink a soup made from a poisonous mushroom!? No! It's when... they are forgotten." - (One Piece)
We are enslaved by Aliens, we just don't know it. They are basically humans who have ascended due to vast knowledge. When you die, you are reincarnated because you don't have a certain amount of knowledge to ascend.
Why do you think there's no-one like Sun Tzu or Leo Da Vinci anymore?
She'll never get to see her 'W'-kun again; all the time she being watching him closely[...]and her favorite time, watching him take a bath… yes readers 'X' is just as perverted as 'Y' and more of a stalker than 'Z', bad combination. She stayed crying for hours until she finally cried herself to sleep.
For the love of God, do not break the fourth wall mid-paragraph for no fucking reason, especially when it's a fic someone is supposed to take seriously. For satirical and humour fics, I can understand it, but this is appalling.
Bashing, blatant yaoi, non-asshole kyuubii, replay of the kyuubii attack if the outcome is practically the same, non-justified ooc, Naru-Hina (The archived are over saturated with this shit).
“What a terrible story. But appropriate for our world. Sometimes I feel like I’m walking over a giant pile of shit. Morality and justice don’t really suit me. Words like that and what comes out of asses are surprisingly similar.” - (Black Lagoon)
"If you have time to think of a beautiful end, then live beautifully until the end." - (Gintama)
"If you're always worried about crushing the ants beneath you...you won't be able to walk." - (Berserk)
"I’ve never expected a miracle. I'll get things done myself." - (Berserk)
"To obtain, something of equal value must be lost." - (Full Metal Alchemist)
"If living means bowing down to the likes of you bastards, I'd rather die on my feet with my head held high." - (Samurai Champloo)
"If you pretend to feel a certain way, the feeling can become genuine all by accident."
- (Darker Than Black)
"When do you think people die? When they are shot through the heart by the bullet of a pistol? No. When they are ravaged by an incurable disease? No. When they drink a soup made from a poisonous mushroom!? No! It's when... they are forgotten." - (One Piece)
First one's a self-insert and the second one is another one of those cat stories. I guess that self-inserts will always exist, but can people STOP with the cat stories? Why don't they ever turn into dogs or wolves-oh wait! That's DeviantArt's schtick.
That last one's summary sounded like a parody or something. But, I don't like all that drug use, child abuse, and rape stuff. I guess I can add that as another one of my peeves.
Haven't read Naruto fanfiction in a while, but I remember some stuff I highly disliked:
- Good Sauce
- Sakura bashing
- OC self-insert
- Real world AU
- Tsundere Kyuubi
- OOC
- NaruJesus and random power-ups
you have that yuri aura around you : rotfl
p.s. biggest canaan x maria fan on nf : ho
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THAT'S THE SPIRIT, GIRLS!! : mad YOU KNOW WHAT IS WRITTEN IN THE CHERRY BLOSSOM BIBLE!! "ON THE DAY WHEN ALL HOPES SEEM TO BE LOST, THE PINK HAIRED ONE WILL APPEAR, CARRYING A GIANT FUCKING AXE SHINING WITH BADASSERY IN THE LIGHT OF THE RISING SUN."
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EDIT: Oh, you meant yourself? : awesome
Allright then. : hurr
*cracks fingers*
Cobalt, the finest trainer of yuri we know. Your wisdom and elegance know no end. I could go on and on, but words really is too weak to describe you. : hurr
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Originally Posted by Hitt
I swear Blaze, sometimes you're just so cute!
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Originally Posted by Erio Touwa
Say yuri and she appears like a ninja ; 33
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Originally Posted by Chronos
: oh
You're probably the coolest teen I know. All the others are so caught up with their hormones and mood swing and God know what else weed that annoy me to new lengths.
: giogio
And you like yuri. You're okay in my book.
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Originally Posted by Tsukuyo
GODDESS OF PERVS IS RIGHT HERE!
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Originally Posted by Kagura
yuri is cool but femslash is better
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Originally Posted by Darc
Blazing CobaltX, let me blaze your pussy.
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Originally Posted by Wolfarus
Im really glad you're not in charge of the human race. We'd have died out due to lack of breeding a long time ago : hurr
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Originally Posted by Benzaiten
Oh Blaze you're so adorable : hoho
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Originally Posted by Momoka
Blaze was the most evil girl in high school.
That is all.
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Originally Posted by Seto Kaiba
wait wat blaze has a male character in her set
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Originally Posted by Santí
I'm going to be honest.
I didn't recognize Blaze.
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Originally Posted by Saunion
Team 7: lilbro gets sloppy seconds for his troubles
Team 7: anti NS anti SN but SS is <3
Team 7: our conscience tells us we should include Nardo but not too much
Team 7: wah wah but what about poor Saske kewn whine whine
Team 7: the only framework where SS looks half obnoxious instead of total shit
Team 7: who the fuck is Cockashi
Team 7: Sasuke and Sakura plus whatshisface
Team 7: Hokage title, sideship and being the third wheel? We're too nice
Team 7: we ttlly care about the theme of the manga not just one pairing u guis
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Originally Posted by Hadler
Turnabout sisters? sounds like some kind of lesbian incest porn movie
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Originally Posted by Kankurette
Everything is better with yuri.
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Originally Posted by Diddy
I AM WHORING MYSELF OUT SO I CAN SEE MY NAME FOLLOWED BY A QUOTE OF MINE IN YOUR SIGNATURE BLAZING YOU ARE MAKING ME SHAME MYSELF IN FRONT OF YOU I AM HURT
It's why I prefer fanfiction. Because the premise of 100 meter tall fox capable of unprecedented power who actually likes causing destruction submitting to a teenager is ludacris. I much prefer the fics where Kyuubii only cares about freedom and is willing to fuck over everyone to get it; creates Drama and the Inner Antagonist situation.
Fucking marathon single-sentence-paragraphs-with-no-commas-or-punctuation-other-than-periods EVERY-FUCKING-WHERE! Seriously, he'll write a 60-word long paragraph and have NO COMMAS AT ALL. It's just a ridiculously long sentence!
And it's no surprise that SkyMaiden says she likes them, her stuff is just as bloody dull and eye wrenching, except she adds a line break after almost every. Single. SENTENCE.
Fucking marathon single-sentence-paragraphs-with-no-commas-or-punctuation-other-than-periods EVERY-FUCKING-WHERE! Seriously, he'll write a 60-word long paragraph and have NO COMMAS AT ALL. It's just a ridiculously long sentence!
And it's no surprise that SkyMaiden says she likes them, her stuff is just as bloody dull and eye wrenching, except she adds a line break after almost every. Single. SENTENCE.
I cant stand wilkins75 or KyuubiGoku
Don't know what the hell to think about pokemaster12
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Spoiler:
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Originally Posted by Whirlpool
We are enslaved by Aliens, we just don't know it. They are basically humans who have ascended due to vast knowledge. When you die, you are reincarnated because you don't have a certain amount of knowledge to ascend.
Why do you think there's no-one like Sun Tzu or Leo Da Vinci anymore?
