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Old 02-13-2012, 12:34 PM   #661
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After the abrupt end of the Forth Shinobi World War, and Sasuke's sudden change of mind, Amekagure has gained its first Koūkage and she intends to make some serious changes.



At the end of this story, the author SWEARS that her main character isn't a Mary Sue.

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Old 02-14-2012, 03:04 PM   #662
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I know this is bleach...but

'Ichigo feels a sharp pain in his chest. Rukia offers to find the problem. Turns out its a girl. A girl from America. She posseses every power Ichigo has including his hollow. How and why does she have his powers? Please, iam so sorry full summary inside!'

It's an IchiRuki, but her OC is Ichigos soulmate, who is also from America, the same country the author lives in. And shes stronger than Ichigo

I guess it isn't a self-insert though

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Old 02-14-2012, 03:28 PM   #663
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Perfect example of my hate.
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I have three main pet peeves with fanfiction;
1. OCs (self inserts)

It is rarely ever done well. 9/10 times its being forced down my throat to acknowledge how "awesome" this OC main character is, but in reality it is just another terrible Mary Sue. Don't get me wrong I don't mind a small OC here and there, but when its a main character it is most the time akward and painful since you can feel with every word that the author is inserting themselves as the "cool kid" in the Naruto universe.

Honestly I'm sure IC Raikage or any of the kages for that matter, would have bitch-slapped that Mary Sue Oc around her second sentence.


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Old 02-14-2012, 04:01 PM   #664
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Perfect example of my hate.

Honestly I'm sure IC Raikage or any of the kages for that matter, would have bitch-slapped that Mary Sue Oc around her the second sentence.
Read the reviews, i said that

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Old 02-14-2012, 04:11 PM   #665
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She's totally a mary-sue. The five kages should just bitch slap her and tell her to gtfo
Found it.

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Old 02-14-2012, 06:43 PM   #666
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Found it.
I would laugh hysterically if my review actually happened.

Kokukage or whatever: Madara-chan, put them under my mary-sue genjutsu

Madara: ....what? No.

*Raikage v2 speed bitchslaps her to the door*

*Onoki points towards ame* "Get the fuck out"

Me:

EDIT: She deleted it

My one review broke her will and made her delete it, i should get a medal or something

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Old 02-14-2012, 09:28 PM   #667
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I would laugh hysterically if my review actually happened.

Kokukage or whatever: Madara-chan, put them under my mary-sue genjutsu

Madara: ....what? No.

*Raikage v2 speed bitchslaps her to the door*

*Onoki points towards ame* "Get the fuck out"

Me:
I approve of this development.

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EDIT: She deleted it

My one review broke her will and made her delete it, i should get a medal or something
Mary Sue elimination confirmed.


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Old 02-15-2012, 10:54 PM   #668
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'Kit'

Seriously what the fuck?

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Old 02-15-2012, 11:14 PM   #669
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'Kit'

Seriously what the fuck?
Tsundere Kyuubi motherly love obviously

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She'll never get to see her 'W'-kun again; all the time she being watching him closely[...]and her favorite time, watching him take a bath… yes readers 'X' is just as perverted as 'Y' and more of a stalker than 'Z', bad combination. She stayed crying for hours until she finally cried herself to sleep.
For the love of God, do not break the fourth wall mid-paragraph for no fucking reason, especially when it's a fic someone is supposed to take seriously. For satirical and humour fics, I can understand it, but this is appalling.

Don't even get me started on the grammar


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Old 02-16-2012, 08:04 PM   #670
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^ I fucking second that.

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Old 02-17-2012, 11:54 PM   #671
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WTF did I just read? FUUU~ this thread has me in shits and giggles. My early fics don't seem soo bad now.

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Old 02-18-2012, 12:35 AM   #672
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WTF did I just read? FUUU~ this thread has me in shits and giggles. My early fics don't seem soo bad now.
If you think that's bad then check this guy out at your own risk.

Read one story and I guarantee that you will feel, hear, smell and taste your brain throwing up.

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Old 02-18-2012, 12:43 AM   #673
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Bashing, blatant yaoi, non-asshole kyuubii, replay of the kyuubii attack if the outcome is practically the same, non-justified ooc, Naru-Hina (The archived are over saturated with this shit).

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Old 02-18-2012, 11:12 AM   #675
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non-asshole kyuubii
This is starting to become canon.


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Went to go read some Akatsuki centric fanfiction and found a new pet peeve.

The common portayal of Akatsuki in fanfiction. Also sickeningly obvious self-inserts that become part of the Akatsuki for no reason at all.

Corona: age: 17. Lives with older brother. Wanted mice, got the Akatsuki. What happens to the Akatsuki when stranded in our world, in Northern Idaho of all places!

When Katherine, Tanith and Samantha find nine kittens on their front porch in the middle of nowhere, what will they do? And what if the kittens just happen to be nine psycho murderers from another world? Watch out Earth, because here come the Akatsuki!

Madara is a drug addict who has hit rock bottom because of his addiction. While whoring himself out to anyone and everyone, Izuna must watch from the sidelines as Madara destroys his life. Can he save his big brother? Drug use, child abuse, rape, ect

Honestly, WTF is this shit?
First one's a self-insert and the second one is another one of those cat stories. I guess that self-inserts will always exist, but can people STOP with the cat stories? Why don't they ever turn into dogs or wolves-oh wait! That's DeviantArt's schtick.

That last one's summary sounded like a parody or something. But, I don't like all that drug use, child abuse, and rape stuff. I guess I can add that as another one of my peeves.

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Old 02-18-2012, 12:08 PM   #676
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Haven't read Naruto fanfiction in a while, but I remember some stuff I highly disliked:
- Good Sauce
- Sakura bashing
- OC self-insert
- Real world AU
- Tsundere Kyuubi
- OOC
- NaruJesus and random power-ups

That's all I can think of right now...

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This is starting to become canon.
It's why I prefer fanfiction. Because the premise of 100 meter tall fox capable of unprecedented power who actually likes causing destruction submitting to a teenager is ludacris. I much prefer the fics where Kyuubii only cares about freedom and is willing to fuck over everyone to get it; creates Drama and the Inner Antagonist situation.

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Anything by the author Raptorcloak.

Fucking marathon single-sentence-paragraphs-with-no-commas-or-punctuation-other-than-periods EVERY-FUCKING-WHERE! Seriously, he'll write a 60-word long paragraph and have NO COMMAS AT ALL. It's just a ridiculously long sentence!

And it's no surprise that SkyMaiden says she likes them, her stuff is just as bloody dull and eye wrenching, except she adds a line break after almost every. Single. SENTENCE.

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Anything by the author Raptorcloak.

Fucking marathon single-sentence-paragraphs-with-no-commas-or-punctuation-other-than-periods EVERY-FUCKING-WHERE! Seriously, he'll write a 60-word long paragraph and have NO COMMAS AT ALL. It's just a ridiculously long sentence!

And it's no surprise that SkyMaiden says she likes them, her stuff is just as bloody dull and eye wrenching, except she adds a line break after almost every. Single. SENTENCE.
I cant stand wilkins75 or KyuubiGoku

Don't know what the hell to think about pokemaster12

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